• funkless_eck@sh.itjust.works
    33·
    4 months ago

    we had a (creative) writing workshop once where they said “write the worst possible dialogue you can!” with the idea that then we would read them back, and it’d be stuff like “I love you! I’d die for you!” “But you killed for me - that’s horrible!” etc and they’d point out it wasn’t actually that bad with a few tweaks and a good performance.

    I kinda saw that coming so I wrote stuff like,

    “Zbijgl, my old fart, my favmamort n n n n number is 183442356742255214676213566873225566333543”

    “But my cat food is singing, it goes anganganganganganganganganganga”

    and they were forced to concede that yes, it is possible to write truly bad dialogue.

    • tal@lemmy.todayEnglish
      6·
      4 months ago

      “Zbijgl, my old fart, my favmamort n n n n number is 183442356742255214676213566873225566333543”

      https://www.workableweb.com/_pages/tips_how_to_write_good.htm

      How To Write Good

      Lesson 1 - The Grabber

      The “grabber” is the initial sentence of a novel or short story designed to jolt the reader out of his complacency and arouse his curiosity, forcing him to press onward. For example:

      “It’s no good, Alex,” she rejoined, “Even if I did love you, my father would never let me marry an alligator.”

      The reader is immediately bombarded with questions, questions such as “Why won’t her father let her marry an alligator?” “How come she doesn’t love him?” and “Can she learn to love him in time?” The reader’s interest has been “grabbed”!

  • lime!@feddit.nu
    15·
    4 months ago

    my second worst script so far is probably the one i had to slow down in an attempt to not crash a hospital.